The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is said that
humans
have
gain
Change the verb form
gained
show examples
great
successes
Fix the agreement mistake
success
show examples
from studying the outer world.
However
,
this
investment should be used more efficiently for other fields. In my opinion, I partly agree with the statement. About a
half century
Add a hyphen
half-century
show examples
ago,
humans
found a way to bring people out of
this
world. A few years after, in
1970s
Change the article
the 1970s
show examples
, mankind achieved
an
Remove the article
apply
show examples
enormous success, by pushing astronauts to the moon by spaceship from the ground. It has brought a new age for science and many other fields. It gives the dream of accommodating
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
other planets to be the truth closer than ever. It may solve the issue of
over population
Correct your spelling
overpopulation
show examples
on the ground, which is extremely concerning in the 21st century.
For example
, a habitable planet like Mars is now
being test
Change the verb form
being tested
show examples
to be a new house for
humans
. More than that, universal science
also
helps the life below much
improved
Wrong verb form
improve
show examples
. Many services
in
Change preposition
on
show examples
the earth are now being
help
Wrong verb form
helped
show examples
with
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
hand of satellites.
For instance
, people now
using
Wrong verb form
use
show examples
satellites map and images from outer
space
to forecast weather, which
make
Change the verb form
makes
show examples
our life much more convenient.
However
, there are remaining many aspects
on
Change preposition
of
show examples
the Earth
need
Correct pronoun usage
that need
show examples
carrying more carefully
instead
of focusing on
space
research. In many developing countries, infrastructures are lacking and need
helping
Replace the word
help
show examples
from all
the
Change preposition
over the
show examples
world. But the governments just ignore and focus on
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
space
travel. It gives an imbalance in the development of the whole society.
For example
,
food
Correct article usage
the food
show examples
lacking issue is solved not much properly, since the investment for
space
study
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
much bigger.
To sum up
,
space
science brings plenty of benefits, but it could be used more effectively
for
Change preposition
in
show examples
other fields. The solution
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
this
problem for
humans
is well
balancing
Replace the word
balance
show examples
between
space
travel and social aspects.
Submitted by nguyencamnhi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
    What to do next:
    Look at other essays: