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The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind, but it could be more usefully applied. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is said that
humans
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gain
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 great
successes
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success
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 from studying the outer world.
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,
this
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 investment should be used more efficiently for other fields. In my opinion, I partly agree with the statement. About a
half century
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 ago,
humans
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 found a way to bring people out of
this
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 world. A few years after, in
1970s
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, mankind achieved
an
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enormous success, by pushing astronauts to the moon by spaceship from the ground. It has brought a new age for science and many other fields. It gives the dream of accommodating
in
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 other planets to be the truth closer than ever. It may solve the issue of
over population
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overpopulation
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 on the ground, which is extremely concerning in the 21st century.
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, a habitable planet like Mars is now
being test
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 to be a new house for
humans
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. More than that, universal science
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 helps the life below much
improved
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. Many services
in
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 the earth are now being
help
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 with
a
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 hand of satellites.
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, people now
using
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 satellites map and images from outer
space
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 to forecast weather, which
make
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 our life much more convenient.
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, there are remaining many aspects
on
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 the Earth
need
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that need
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 carrying more carefully
instead
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 of focusing on
space
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 research. In many developing countries, infrastructures are lacking and need
helping
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 from all
the
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over the
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 world. But the governments just ignore and focus on
the
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space
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 travel. It gives an imbalance in the development of the whole society.
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,
food
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 lacking issue is solved not much properly, since the investment for
space
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 study
are
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 much bigger.
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,
space
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 science brings plenty of benefits, but it could be used more effectively
for
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in
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 other fields. The solution
of
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to
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this
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 problem for
humans
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 is well
balancing
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balance
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 between
space
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 travel and social aspects.

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