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People from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficulty to get university education. Some people think that the government should make it easier for them to enter universities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is argued that the government should help
people
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 who can't attend university
due to
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 unwealthy backgrounds. I totally agree with
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 opinion. In the first place, I believe that allowing
people
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 to get a universitarian culture is an added value for the whole
country
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. I strongly support the importance of culture and knowledge to become a better person and,
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, a better citizen.
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, to ease the opportunity to study after high school and to deepen personal
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 could be kind of a weapon that all governments should use to become a greater nation.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 who come from poor backgrounds, and need to start working immediately after high school, are more likely to accept whatever job they are offered.
This
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 situation can cause a higher rate of underpaid, exploited and even illegal work, which is exactly what a
country
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 should try to avoid the most.
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, I think that the possibility to get a higher level of
education
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 should be given to those who prove deserving. In spite of their economic possibilities,
people
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 who show some talent, ability or simply a good willingness to learn more and improve their knowledge should have the opportunity to do that. As long as individuals demonstrate to commit to enlarging their culture and to be worth the money
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 spent for their
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, it is worth it. The more students a
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 helps to reach a high level of
education
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, the more likely the same
country
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 will not have to face the problem of finding itself without a specialized workforce and brain drill. In conclusion, I believe that
education
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 is the key to getting better
people
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 and better dwellers,
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 the money
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 spent to make easier access to university
education
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 represents an actual investment.
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