the graph below shows the number of enquiries received by Tourist Information Office in one city a six-month period in 2011

the graph below shows the number of enquiries received by Tourist Information Office in one city a six-month period in 2011
The line chart illustrates the amount of three different communication types which are person, letter/email and
telephone
from January to June 2011.
Overall
, there was
dramatically
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increase in person and
telephone
after
March
,
although
, people were using fewer and fewer
letter
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letters
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and
email
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emails
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between
March
to May.
Firstly
, the number of people which
are prefer
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face-to-face contact was always increasing from 400 to 1900. The
telephone
users had stabled for one month from
March
to April, but, there was a sharp increase in
telephone
between April and May. The sharpest increase was about 450 people in person from
March
to April.
On the other hand
, there was
slight
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a slight
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decrease in letter users from January to
March
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words telephone, march with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • in person
  • by letter/email
  • by telephone
  • general trend
  • six-month period
  • significant increase
  • steady rise
  • decline
  • peak
  • fluctuations
  • monthly data
  • comparison
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