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The graph below shows the number of undergraduate students in thousands in four countries between 1995 and 2015.

The graph below shows the number of undergraduate students in thousands in four countries between 1995 and 2015.
The line graph gives information about the
number
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 of a lot of undergraduate
students
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 in four European countries. The units are measured in thousands
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 1995 to 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of undergraduate
students
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 in
Spain
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 and Greece increased steadily over the period shown.
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, the same figure for Sweden and
Austria
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 experienced a fluctuation. The same data of a lot of undergraduate
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 in
Spain
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 and Greece rose
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slightly. The
number
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 of undergraduate
students
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 in
Spain
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 grew moderately from 250 in 1995 to 350 in 2010. The figure of undergraduate
students
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 of thousands in
Spain
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 reduced dramatically between 350 in 2010 and 300 in 2015. The data of undergraduate
students
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 in Greece went up slowly from 100 in 1995 to more than 150 in 2015. The same data of undergraduate
students
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 in Sweden and
Austria
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 saw a fluctuation. The
number
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 of undergraduate
students
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 in Sweden declined marginally from more than 350 in 1995 to less than 250 in 2015. The same figure for undergraduate
students
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 in thousands in
Austria
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 stagnated at 250 from 1995 till 2010. The
number
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 of undergraduate
students
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 in
Austria
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 went up significantly between 250 in 2010 and 300 in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, spain, austria with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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