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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenagers and society as a whole.

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In our fast-paced world, some
people
 consider that students need to be volunteers in their spare
time
.
However
, others, including me, reckon that it is not a true way for learners to do unpaid
work
.
This
 essay will give some data about why the government does not have to force them to help the local community. There are a number of reasons why teenagers should not be permitted to
work
 as volunteers.
To begin
 with, most young
people
 are already under enough pressure with their studies. Nowadays their studies require enormous energy and teachers expect their students to do all home tasks and be active during the lesson on a daily basis. If they do volunteer
work
, they may face extra pressure.
Moreover
, doing unpaid
work
 in their free
time
 takes the young's
time
. If they do that kind of
work
, they cannot find enough
time
 for other necessary activities which are fundamental for their development. At the same
time
, I do not believe that the government can take any profits from teenagers' volunteering.
Although
 forcing young
people
 to do unpaid
work
 is useful for small companies that take the help, the country can not take any benefits.
Instead
,they disturb them.
In addition
 to
this
, it may cause a protest. Most children feel used to it when they are forced to do some unpaid
work
. Plus, parents do not want to raise their children with
such
 kind of
work
. If governments force them to do volunteering, it may cause protests among
people
 who want that their children reside in convenient lives.
To sum up
, even though taking help from teenagers is beneficial for the local community, it may cause some hardships for the young.
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