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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.

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These days ,there are many beliefs about the opportunities that individuals will have throughout their life. There is an opinion says that nowadays a human can gain plenty of
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.the standing against opinion believes that there are limited choices in our lives. In
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 essay, I will explain myself frankly and provide evidence of my beliefs. When we look at history and compare the past and the present, we see that too many
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 were put underneath human hands,
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, after starvation ages we can choose between hundreds of food dishes. In the age of globalisation and social
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 muti jobs have been introduced particularly online carriers. In
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 regard,if someone lost his profession there are hundreds of other choices. he could gather his staff and seek
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 in other countries. Females
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 find themselves an important part of society and they started their role with many
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, a good portion thinks that life demands and huge market competition limits the chances .
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, there are large numbers of new investment projects that fail .
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, nowadays men and women found themselves in a place where a lot of opportunities are available that can never have by their parents or their grandparents,from the food to the lifestyle and carries.Even if a person fails at something , he has multiple roads to take and different ideas to apply. We can see how people take risks and put their many in highly competitive sectors
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 because they believe that many
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 still existed and the beauty of life is mainly located in the diversity of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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