Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this is a bad example for adolescents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is sometimes argued that

celebrities

are now well-known for their money rather than for what they achieved in their career paths,

this

could be a downward trend for the youngster. In my opinion, I believe that these

celebrities

could have a bad influence on the young.

In contrast

, there are some stars

who

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are good for

adolescents

. First and foremost,

celebrities

have a robust impact on youngsters through their glamorous

lifestyle

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. They usually upload their daily

life

on their social media accounts and attract many people, especially their fans, to show how wealthy they are

instead

of showing their rewards or daily practices.

Although

they are affluent, some of them become wealthy from other factors

such

as families, friends or illegal activities.

For example

, A was a famous star in B, she posted many pictures on his Facebook to show his richness.

However

, the money he received came from his girlfriend

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forcing her for several years, which has a bad influence on the youngsters about receiving money without working.

Thus

,

adolescents

could gain misleading information and have a different sight of

life

from others which changes the way they live and become lazy in their work.

On the other hand

, there are many

celebrities

who have a good impact on

adolescents

through their behaviour and achievements.

Due to

the good

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they have to build up, they have to show their effort for society and well-being behaviour.

As a result

, the audience could be impressed by their attitude

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and their social and daily activities which are similar to regular people.

Such

celebrities

could inspire the youngster to work hard and pay more attention to social issues and activities

instead

of having negative thinking about working and living.

For instance

, singer A attracts many fans

about

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his simple

life

and raises funds of a million dollars for his social volunteer projects for illegible children. In conclusion,

while

there are some

celebrities

who have a bad impact on

adolescents

through showing their wealth and

glamourous

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life

, some of them have a good influence on the youngster on the way they live. It is crucial for children to differentiate between whom they want to learn from.