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Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations. Others think that it is practical aid and advice that is needed. Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

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Financial
assistance
 has sparked a heated debate.
While
 some people accept that developing nations should be received funds from international organizations, I
also
 believe that it is necessary that international organizations give these
countries
 practical aid and advice. On the one hand, there are a couple of vital reasons why some people agree that international organizations need to
support
 developing
countries
 financially.
Firstly
, funds can be essential for the construction of infrastructure, a task that often requires a substantial amount of investment.
For example
, the Vietnamese government had to remove a quota on Japanese cars in exchange for the Japanese government's approval of funding for two major agricultural projects in the Red River Delta. As there are many other methods of calling for investment that
do
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 not often require
countries
 to forego their interests,
such
 as using the build-operate-transfer model of project financing, I argue that international financial
support
 is unnecessary.
On the other hand
, I am convinced that non-financial
assistance
 from the international community plays an important role. First and foremost,
this
 is because sustainable development necessitates the building of a strong workforce and the acquisition of technology, neither of which can be provided solely by financial help. In fact, many forms of technical
assistance
 have been offered to developing
countries
, including knowledge sharing and the transfer of technological innovations. There are many success stories of less-developed nations receiving
this
 type of
support
, as can be seen in the classic case of basmati rice production in Indonesia. In the late 1990s, a group of Indian plant geneticists and agricultural specialists was deployed in Indonesia to share their expertise with and to transfer the mass-production technology of
this
 variety of rice to their Indonesian counterparts.
As a result
, the enormous and long-lasting success of the basmati rice industry in Indonesia. In conclusion,
although
 it is essential that comes to financial
support
 for developing nations, it seems to me that non-financial
assistance
 from the international community has a pivotal role to play in the developing world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • developing countries
  • financial help
  • international organizations
  • practical aid
  • technical assistance
  • vocational training
  • sustainable development
  • dependency
  • misuse
  • corruption
  • empower communities
  • local skills
  • targeted solutions
  • flexibility
  • capacity-building
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