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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given blueprint describes the future refurbishment in the city of Brandfield which have two options in order to construct a new shopping
centre
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.
Overall
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, there are several places that have been built
such
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 as a golf park in the southwestern
area
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, an industrial estate in the southeastern
side
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, and a city
centre
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 placed in between those two infrastructures. Meanwhile, a housing estate is on the northern part of the map. The first option is that the mall will be constructed in the northeastern
area
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 next to the housing complex. It will be surrounded by a river on the eastern
side
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, a railway on the southern
side
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, and a road on the western
side
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.
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 the second choice is to build the shopping
centre
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 in the southeastern
area
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 near the city
centre
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 and industrial estate.
In addition
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, there is no river flowing in
this
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 particular
area
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.
However
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, if the leader chooses to add the mall on
this
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 land, it will have two pavements both on the western and northern sides and a railway on the eastern
side
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 around it.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, area, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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