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Nowadays in western countries, couples are choose to have no children, and for this issue there will be advantages and disadvantages, this essay will discuss both sides.

There are numerous advantages of having no
children
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, financially speaking, income will be consumed by two
person
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 only, without any additional expenses
such
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 as
children
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’s school tuition and medical bills.
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,
couples
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 can save a good amount of money and have a lot of fun trips. Around the world.
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Also
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 a big chance for investment to secure a remarkable retirement plan.
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less responsibility as the only thing to worry about is the other adult partner without any attachment.
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having the freedom of reallocation,
couples
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 can change their life plans without any consideration , As an example they can change their home location, city, and maybe country easily without having any restrictions.
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, elder
couples
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 who choose not to have
children
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 will face loneliness and boredom, because they will live by themselves with no one will look after them which may cause some mental
illness
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illnesses
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such
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 as anxiety and depression.
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, other health issues like breast cancer, as a female, breastfeeding
reduce
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 breast cancer.
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, several illnesses require a relative blood or organ donation, and by having no
children
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 no relatives will be available for donations. Not only that,
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 decision will discontinue the family tree. All the family histories and legacies will no longer continue. In conclusion, nowadays many
western
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couples
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 choose not to have
children
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, and every decision has
it
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advantage
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advantages
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 and disadvantages.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial burden
  • professional advancement
  • lifestyle flexibility
  • environmental footprint
  • relationship dynamics
  • mentorship
  • population control
  • personal fulfillment
  • childcare responsibilities
  • community involvement
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