The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The diagram shows the process by which milk and related products are produced.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The picture illustrates the stages involved in the production of dairy products starting with the raw material to its various final forms.
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, the steps are divided into 2 main parts: the first takes place on the farm where the raw material is generated
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the second occurs at the production site.
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, the cows are made to feed adequately prior to the milking process which is done through the aid of a milking machine twice daily. Afterwards, the fresh milk is stored in large containers in a refrigerator and
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transported in large quantities to the factory via a tanker. On arrival at the site for processing, the freshly milked product is subjected to different procedures to give rise to solid products
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as cheese and butter, cream and processed dairy. The solid is packed in wraps
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the cream and liquid forms are kept in bottles.
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, pasteurization, repackaging and delivery of the final products to supermarkets and grocery stores making it available for consumers.
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