The Chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.

The Chart below shows  the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in the year 1999.
The pie chart gives information
abut
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the percentage of people who visited four different tourist attractions in Britain and the table graph
show
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the proportion of
visitors
to five different activities in Themes Park during
the
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1999.
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, the two most attractions for tourists were
themes
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parks
and zoos.
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visitors
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themes
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parks
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the main and
the
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beautiful place was the Blackpool Pleasure
beach
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. In terms of the pie chart, Theme
Parks
, museums and galleries got the same
percent
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of
visitors
. 16
percent
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of
visitors
in Britain chose to see the historic houses and monuments
,
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when
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only 9
percent
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of them visited
wild life
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wildlife
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zoos and
parks
. Regards to table chart, Blackpool Pleasure Beach was the tourists'
favorite
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park. 17
percent
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and 16
percent
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of
visitors
chose to enjoy activities in Pleasureland and Alton Towers theme
parks
,
while
the least visited
parks
were Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland in Windsor.
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