Young people are more likely to be involved in car accidents, therefore the legal driving age should be raised to 22 years old. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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contemporary epoch, the number of
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that
car
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accidents
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are raising day by day in order to reduce it. Authority should be increased the legal driving age of teenagers
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up to
22 years old. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
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notion, which I shall discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, owning to several reasons that emphasise, what it should not be
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to 22
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. Primarily , it is the best age to get
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a license
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of driving
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car
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a car
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. To elaborate more, coming
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up to
18 ,
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faced lots of situations and
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problems
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between 13 to 18 and they get
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of experience and knowledge of the study and real life which helps to become a mature person to apply for
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.
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,
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knowledge helps them to clear the test and able to person become
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a safe
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driver.
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, it leads to
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a positive
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impact on young
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.
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research revealed that young
people
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are
capable
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of
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car
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a car
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rather than older
people
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because of
ability
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their ability
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and no weakness in the body.
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, there are some aspects that determine, the raised of
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accidents
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are
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not
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the reason
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of
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young one.
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accidents
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can
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happen
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the
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bad roads or
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problems. To a greater extent fact is that sometimes roads are not plane
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overuse of road or it is made up of bad quality raw material.
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, sometimes cars which they liked to travel
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not sustainable for roads.
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,
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tourists
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always travel in cold places by
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but some cars are not capable
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hill areas which leads to a number of
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just because of
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facilities.
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, it is clear from
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discussion that
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there are abundant factors that examine it is not the problem of young
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people
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age .
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, it
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be
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affected by cars company facilities.
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