Many people use distance learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it can not bring the same benefits of attending college of university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, with the development of society and
progress
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the progress
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of technology,
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an increasing
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number of
people
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are learning through
remote-study
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the remote-study
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way.
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, whether it can
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advantage
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to
shcools
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schools
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is a controversial issue. In my
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opinion
,
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approach
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can bring some benefits, but
advantages
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the advantages
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of attending college are different.
first,
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it is obvious that studying in school is unified management. And there is no
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method in other places.
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means that
people
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can be supervised to attend classes and learn more systematically.
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school
timetable
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timetables
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and teachers from different majors in universities.
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not only plans the time
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but
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allows
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more
favorite
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courses.
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of
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, everyone will
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have
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a final exam, which
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the equality of the exam.
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, folk can communicate with many
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in school.
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, when you do group work and need to team up with classmates, everyone will discuss problems together and start
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to know each other.
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, when
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unfamiliar areas in
study
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the study
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,
person
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a person
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also
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seek
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help from teachers and schoolmates.
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not only
exercise
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exercises
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social skills but
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improve expression ability. If you are at home, you can only communicate with your family. In sum, remote learning programs cannot bring alike benefits as attending college. Meanwhile, it
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has some good aspects,
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as more freedom of time and so on. I think the learning environment and place are important, but the most important thing is one’s own desire for knowledge.
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, I hope everybody will work hard everywhere.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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