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In order to improve a country's education system, young students should be allowed to openly criticize their teachers during class time. Do you agree with this? What are some other ways education systems could be improved?

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In the times that we live in, open-mindedness and informality are considered more
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 than obeying value systems.
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, we hear a suggestion from some quarters that
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 should be allowed to criticize their teachers openly, during class time. I do believe in open mindedness but I disagree with the viewpoint presented here. If
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permission to criticize teachers during class time, first of
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 could be used as a tool by disinterested
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 to waste precious teaching time.
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, learning can only occur when there is a feeling of respect for the
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 and with
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 openness there would be
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 of respect and the teaching environment would be thereby spoiltThirdly,
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 are sometimes too young to grasp the intention of the
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 or the need of the subject being taught. In
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 a situation the criticism would not be of any help as it would only be a misguided judgment.
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, people who advocate
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 openness in the classroom say that
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 can make the relationship between the
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 and the student friendlier.
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, I believe that if the teachers are well trained, they know the psychological aspects of teaching young children and
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, our education environment would be better served.
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, in the event of receiving some unwelcome behaviour from a
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, there could be a system in place where the student or a group of
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 is allowed to submit a written to the principal or any other authority that can
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 look into the matter and resolve it responsibly.
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, even though the system of open criticism may appear democratic, I opine against
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 method considering its possible drawbacks.
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