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Government spend millions of dollars each year on theri space programs. Some people argue that money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

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 learning is a modern technology for human beings. It is true that it costs millions of dollars each year to do research on
this
 vast topic.
However
, a number of individuals think it will be good enough if
regime
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spend
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spends
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 that
money
 on
nation
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the nation
a nation
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 to get relief on some items in the market. I agree with the
statment
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statement
 that
money
 should be spent on citizens.
First
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 reason is,
Money
 is a collection of tax from
tax payers
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taxpayers
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 of a
nation
. It should spend on them. If
government
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the government
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 do
this
, it is a
gurrentee
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guarantee
 that the
econemy
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economy
 will boost with a huge impact. Because poor individuals will get some subsidy on items for living
good
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the good
a good
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 life.
For example
, In Pakistan, the count of individuals
result
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results
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 in
large
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a large
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 number of poor human beings. They cannot live their lives with happiness.
Hence
,
amount
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the amount
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 should be used on them.
Secondly
, expenditure on
space
 programs is just like
a
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apply
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money
 laundering. Means to waste
money
, or just a way to theft
money
 from the budget.
In addition
, let's suppose
if
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the
space
 program touched its success point and the
nation
 is poor
then
, what that program will do for the
poors
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poor
.
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 Even they cannot afford
space
travels
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travel
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. So, I think it is totally a loss of
money
 to invest in.
For instance
, Elon Mask
is
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a
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the
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 founder of
tesla
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Tesla
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 company, owner of
twitter
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Twitter
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 spent
his
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a
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 huge amount of
money
 on
space
 programs and
he
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failed many times.
To conclude
,
although
 big economy countries are spending
the
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their
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 assets on technology but when it
come
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comes
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 to poor countries, it should be
waste
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a waste
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 of assets. Millions of dollars will put
simle
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smile
simple
 on
face
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the face
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 of
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the poors
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poors
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poor
 if
regime
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the regime
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 will use it for
nation
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the nation
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.
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