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The following diagram illustrates how the recycling of waste paper is treated.

The following diagram illustrates how the recycling of waste paper is treated.
The following diagram illustrates how the recycling of
waste
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paper
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 is treated. It is noticeable that the process of
waste
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paper
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 recycling has 6 main stages, starting from the collection of
waste
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paper
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 and ending with a machine. It can be seen that the first
stage
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 of the process is when
waste
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paper
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 is collected from public
paper
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 banks and from businesses. After having been classified by hand,
paper
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 with low quality is removed.
High quality
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paper
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,
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, is kept to use for the next
stage
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.
Then
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, the
paper
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 is transported to the
paper
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 plant in order to create
pulp
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. After collecting
pulp
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 from grinding
paper
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, the next
stage
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 is cleaning. Other materials
such
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 as staples are taken out of the
pulp
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.
Following
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this
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 is
De-Inking
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the De-Inking
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stage
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. Inks and glues are removed. The final
stage
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 is a
paper
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-making machine. The
pulp
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 is produced by a machine to be useable
paper
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, paper, stage, pulp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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