The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The line chart illustrates fish and three types of meat expenditure in Europe from 1979 to 2004. Units are measured in
grams
per person per week.
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It is clear that
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the
beef Correct article usage
apply
were
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was
most
popular meat at the beginning Correct article usage
the most
whereas
it Linking Words
replaced
by Add a missing verb
was replaced
the
chicken Correct article usage
apply
in
the end of the period. Change the preposition
at
In addition
, fishes were Linking Words
throughout
the least common choice that European preferred.
In terms of beef, people in Europe spent about 220 Change preposition
apply
grams
per week in 1979, but fluctuated for the next decade and surpassed by chicken which Use synonyms
is
increased significantly in 1989. Unnecessary verb
apply
By contrast
, chicken stood at 140 Linking Words
grams
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while
rose rapidly to approximately 250 Linking Words
grams
as opposed to beef declined about a half in 2004.
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On the other hand
, the among of lamb witnessed a vast decrease from 150 Linking Words
grams
to 60 Use synonyms
grams
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through
the whole period. Change preposition
throughout
Furthermore
, fish had a Linking Words
marginally
fluctuation but still maintain the level Change the adverb
marginal
on
50 Change preposition
of
grams
.Use synonyms
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