The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004
The line chart illustrates fish and three types of meat expenditure in Europe from 1979 to 2004. Units are measured in
grams
per person per week.
It is clear that
the
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beef
were
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most
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the most
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popular meat at the beginning
whereas
it
replaced
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by
the
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chicken
in
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at
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the end of the period.
In addition
, fishes were
throughout
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the least common choice that European preferred. In terms of beef, people in Europe spent about 220
grams
per week in 1979, but fluctuated for the next decade and surpassed by chicken which
is
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increased significantly in 1989.
By contrast
, chicken stood at 140
grams
while
rose rapidly to approximately 250
grams
as opposed to beef declined about a half in 2004.
On the other hand
, the among of lamb witnessed a vast decrease from 150
grams
to 60
grams
through
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the whole period.
Furthermore
, fish had a
marginally
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fluctuation but still maintain the level
on
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of
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50
grams
.
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