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Crime is a big problem in the world, and nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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In the modern era, Criminal
offences
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 are increasing day by day.
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, many people believe that there is nothing that can be done to prevent these
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 or to lower
crime
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rates
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.
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 notion should be seen as completely wrong and there are various actions that we can do to prevent it
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 as increasing the alertness of possible
offences
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 and ensuring proper schooling is being provided to the community. To commence with, Ensuring mandatory education for society is the key step to the prevention of
crimes
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. To elaborate,
literacy
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 is a skill that provides, a person, with a clear understanding of what is right and what is wrong. Generally, uneducated people have a large contribution to increasing
crime
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rates
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.
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, In a recent report issued by the
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 Branch of India, they mentioned that
crime
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rates
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 are inversely proportional to
literacy
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rates
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. What it means is that in states, where the
literacy
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 rate is very high, the
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rates
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 there are very low, and vice-versa in states with low
literacy
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rates
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.
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, increasing consciousness towards potential
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 can
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 be done in order to prevent
crime
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. Again, alertness
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 plays a great role in
crime
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 prevention as it gives a person some basic understanding of what is wrong and what is right for society.
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, the public only considers serious
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such
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 as murders or bribing as
crimes
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;
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, they often neglect some
crimes
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 that they think aren't big
crimes
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 as not following traffic rules, or verbally abusing someone and those
crimes
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also
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 count in increasing
crime
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rates
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. To illustrate it with a case scenario, if a person knows about all the possible
crimes
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 that he can face in his life, he will not become a victim of those
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 and don't unintentionally do those
crimes
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.
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, a high
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 rate is not something that can not be tackled, with the help of some schooling and by having basic awareness, one can easily handle
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 ongoing trend. I opine that basic education and awareness campaigns should be done in areas of high
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rates
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 and low
literacy
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rates
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, in order to reduce criminal
offences
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.
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