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In some countries, some criminal trails in law courts are shown on television so that the general public can watch. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 21st century, the crime ratio has increased a lot. Many countries around the globe are telecasting the court
trials
 so the general public can watch. There are upsides and downsides
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 the above statement but I'm my opinion the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
 with, the main advantage of showing court
trials
 on TV is general
people
 are made aware that what happens when someone tries to break the law. To add
further
, government gain faith from the general public and citizens are believing that justice still prevails.
For instance
, the famous
trials
 of the Hollywood actor Mr Depp and Miss Heard
,
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 teaches us that in the eyes of
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law
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 both men and women are treated equally.
Secondly
,
people
 are often afraid to file complaints against politicians and other superior workers, when something wrong happens but
this
 won't be the case anymore.
Moreover
,
this
 will
also
 reduce the case of bribery. As judge knows that the whole world is watching it and if the judgement is based on any biassed and prejudice the
people
 will lose hope and faith in the constitution. There are some possible disadvantages as well. A psychopath will get different ideas to commit
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 crime. And it will be very easy for them to find the loopholes in the book of law.
Furthermore
, it will create a negative impact on the mind of youths as they will be
also
 watching these
trials
.
In addition
 to that, new criminals might be born after watching
this
 , as it gives instant fame. And
people
 will start thinking that if you want to become famous commit a crime and the next day world will know you. In a nutshell, pros outweigh the cons and in the ,end it depends on an individual how he or she perceives it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • educational
  • public trust
  • justice system
  • deterrence
  • awareness
  • invasion of privacy
  • sensationalism
  • bias
  • interference
  • legal proceedings
  • jury
  • witnesses
  • distortion of justice
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