You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
letter to apply for a career which is related to the care of
children
,
in addition
, I could help them to progress and develop.
In other words
, knowing
children
is an important consideration.
Therefore
, I am a psychologist and I have studied at the best college in the metropolitan in Australia. I worked in the nursery for at least three years so I have strong experience.
On the other hand
, my expertise learn music is that I could teach it to your
children
as well as
I am interested in designing gardens and trees so that I can transfer
this
science to your child. In fact, one of the significant issues that exist in families is promoted of education for
children
according to
my experience and ,education
this
problem can be solved in a short time . I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Amirfarzam Shokouhalaei
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