Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some say that artists require current financial
support
from governments,
while
others would argue that
this
money could have been used more wisely.
This
essay agrees with the latter point, despite the fact that politicians could motivate and rule cultural progress using investments, creators could earn wealth by themselves
while
other professionals,
such
as doctors, are highly dependent on the state budget. On the one hand, governments must pay artists to show them which content is preferable for society.
In other words
, by using cash as positive feedback politicians are able to promote their ideas and keep cultural progress under stable supervision.
For example
, during World War Two any songwriter who praised the victory was honoured to write more songs and
as a result
, unite citizens to work and
support
soldiers. I cannot disagree that it was a working strategy,
however
, I believe that
such
oversight limits creativity.
On the other hand
, artists have enough ways to make money
while
medical workers are suffocating
due to
a lack of financial
support
which is critical for them. Songwriters could sell tickets for their concerts as expensive as they want but medicine in many countries is free and supported by the state budget.
Thus
, if part of the budget is spent on creators, doctors are paid much less.
For instance
, after financial reform in Kazakhstan, the local government decided to stop regular
support
of the singers and
instead
rebuild several hospitals,
therefore
my city received better medical treatment and doctors have their salaries increased.
For
this
reason, I believe that it is better to provide
support
to life-critical sectors
instead
of culture. In conclusion, despite strategic supervision over creative people,
this
essay thinks that there are more vital sectors,
such
as medicine that have to be paid more by the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • culture
  • creativity
  • economic growth
  • tourism
  • social development
  • personal development
  • merit
  • financial support
  • balanced
  • transparent
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