Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some say that artists require current financial
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others would argue that
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money could have been used more wisely.
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essay agrees with the latter point, despite the fact that politicians could motivate and rule cultural progress using investments, creators could earn wealth by themselves
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other professionals,
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as doctors, are highly dependent on the state budget. On the one hand, governments must pay artists to show them which content is preferable for society.
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, by using cash as positive feedback politicians are able to promote their ideas and keep cultural progress under stable supervision.
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, during World War Two any songwriter who praised the victory was honoured to write more songs and
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, unite citizens to work and
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soldiers. I cannot disagree that it was a working strategy,
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, I believe that
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oversight limits creativity.
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, artists have enough ways to make money
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medical workers are suffocating
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a lack of financial
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which is critical for them. Songwriters could sell tickets for their concerts as expensive as they want but medicine in many countries is free and supported by the state budget.
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, if part of the budget is spent on creators, doctors are paid much less.
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, after financial reform in Kazakhstan, the local government decided to stop regular
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of the singers and
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rebuild several hospitals,
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my city received better medical treatment and doctors have their salaries increased.
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reason, I believe that it is better to provide
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to life-critical sectors
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of culture. In conclusion, despite strategic supervision over creative people,
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essay thinks that there are more vital sectors,
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as medicine that have to be paid more by the government.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • promote
  • culture
  • creativity
  • economic growth
  • tourism
  • social development
  • personal development
  • merit
  • financial support
  • balanced
  • transparent
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