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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to work for free in their time off, to help the local community, because of the benefits it has on both the individual teenager and society as a whole. I completely agree with
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 thought because it would be profitable for teenagers' learning and would
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 help the communities. Unpaid work teaches us moral lessons that are useful for our adult life. There are so many ambitious and hypocritical people in our society who only get jobs with the sole purpose of earning money.
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, forcing both guys and girls to make some efforts for free will teach them about modesty and generosity.
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, two years ago, I went to all the parks in my city to cut the grass.
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 made me feel useless at first because I was not paid for it, but now I have discovered that you feel much more humble when you do it for charity. Time off tasks is profitable for local communities as well. The mayor’s office does not have to spend its money on these tasks achieved by young guys , and it can solve city problems with their help.
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, in the local community of Florenzia, in Italy, they have saved three times more money in 2025 than in 2023.
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 the fact that the major implemented a new requirement of unpaid work for guys between sixteen and eighteen years old three years ago.
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 shows the evident impact of these types of job over young people.

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coherence cohesion
Write a short ending to repeat your main view. This will make the essay feel complete.
coherence cohesion
Link your ideas more clearly with simple words like first, also, for example, and so.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each main idea has one clear reason and one clear example.
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Answer all parts of the question in a fuller way. You agree, but you should explain more about both teens and society.
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Use examples that are more clear and easy to believe. Then your ideas will be stronger.
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Be careful with some ideas that sound too strong, like saying many people are hypocritical. Softer ideas are better for this task.
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Your position is clear from the start: you fully agree.
coherence cohesion
You give one main idea about teens and one main idea about the community.
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You use examples to support both body paragraphs.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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