Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing. Discuss the causes and solutions.
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4The writer’s position is clear throughout the response and ideas are generally well-developed, well supported and well-organized. The introduction and conclusion are solid. Overall, the structure of the essay is very well organised.
The task response is quite comprehensive and it addresses all parts of the task. The essay could benefit from more varied language and more complex sentence structures. Try to use uncommon lexical items and use paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately if possible.
The lexical resource is good, but there is always scope for using high-level words. Try to incorporate some idiomatic language, phrasal verbs, and less common vocabulary to further enhance the lexical resource.
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and a good control of grammar and punctuation but errors occur as rare minor 'slips'. Try to practice more on minor grammatical points and aim for more complex sentences while avoiding errors.