The diagram below shows how ceramic pots are made. Write an essay for a university lecturer describing the process.
The diagram portrays the manufacturing process of ceramic
pots
in the factory
in Homeland.
Overall
, the production of ceramic pots
consists of 12 steps, which is started with the digging of soil
and finished with the production of pots
.
Soil
is used as a raw material for the production of ceramic pots
. Initially
, the soil
is excavated from the ground by a huge digger and then
transferred by lorry to the factory
in Homeland. Once the soil
is entered into the factory
, it is poured into crushing machines and crushed twice. Next,
small particles of soil
are mixed with water to make a paste. Following that, the paste is moulded and ,subsequently
it is dried for 4-6 hours to evaporate water and be assembled. These assembled clay Add a comma
,subsequently
pots
are placed in an oven at 1000 degrees Celsius for some time. Furthermore
, they are placed inside the colour bin to be coloured. In
addition
the coloured ceramic Add a comma
,addition
pots
are placed into an oven for a second time and are fringed with colour.
Finally
, the finished pots
are packed and stored in a warehouse of the factory
and ,,
Change the punctuation
apply
consequently
the ceramic Add a comma
,consequently
pots
are distributed to markets.Submitted by maryam.veiszadeh on
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