The diagram below shows how ceramic pots are made. Write an essay for a university lecturer describing the process.

The diagram below shows how ceramic pots are made. Write an essay for a university lecturer describing the process.
The diagram portrays the manufacturing process of ceramic
pots
in the
factory
in Homeland.
Overall
, the production of ceramic
pots
consists of 12 steps, which is started with the digging of
soil
and finished with the production of
pots
.
Soil
is used as a raw material for the production of ceramic
pots
.
Initially
, the
soil
is excavated from the ground by a huge digger and
then
transferred by lorry to the
factory
in Homeland. Once the
soil
is entered into the
factory
, it is poured into crushing machines and crushed twice.
Next,
small particles of
soil
are mixed with water to make a paste. Following that, the paste is moulded and ,
subsequently
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it is dried for 4-6 hours to evaporate water and be assembled. These assembled clay
pots
are placed in an oven at 1000 degrees Celsius for some time.
Furthermore
, they are placed inside the colour bin to be coloured.
In
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the coloured ceramic
pots
are placed into an oven for a second time and are fringed with colour.
Finally
, the finished
pots
are packed and stored in a warehouse of the
factory
and ,
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the ceramic
pots
are distributed to markets.
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