You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

With the rising population of major
cities
, more concerns regarding people's
health
are emerging among
the
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society , mainly people think that it impacts a
persons
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well-being negatively, I personally partially agree with
this
notion , as living in the big
cities
can
also
have positive
health
effects ,
this
essay will explain both impacts . First , living in big
cities
can come with lots of
health
problems that can come from many sources ,namely , pollution , densely populated areas ,
stressfull
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stressful
life styles
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and the list goes on , that said , I am going to be talking specifically about pollution , as
this
is a problem that
alot
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a lot
of big cites face , and can severely affect , breathing and eating , which are
essentail
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essential
for our survival ,
for instance
, the city of Mumbai India is said to be one of the biggest worldwide,
furthermore
, the death rates from air
quality related
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diseases is
reltively
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relatively
high
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because the city is very polluted from its vast population .
On the other hand
,
while
there are many
health
risk factors in larger
cities
, the healthcare quality is better than that in small towns or villages ,
therefore
, the frequently ill citizens are more likely to get treated ,
on the contrary
, those in towns ,
although
not
geting
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getting
sick as much , still face some illnesses ,
however
, not always do they get the proper treatment .
To sum up
, living in big
cities
can be bad for one's
health
,
however
, it can
also
provide the best treatment to those who are victims
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the dangers of living in those areas , unlike others who live in rural or
samll palces
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small places
who
in contrast
get less sick but don't have the privilege to get diagnosed in a proper way .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • overcrowding
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • work pressures
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • lack of exercise
  • pandemics
  • green spaces
  • affordability
  • healthcare services
  • recreational facilities
  • cosmopolitan
  • diversity
  • personal development
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