Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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With the rising population of major
cities
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, more concerns regarding people's
health
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are emerging among
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society , mainly people think that it impacts a
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well-being negatively, I personally partially agree with
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notion , as living in the big
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can
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have positive
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effects ,
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essay will explain both impacts . First , living in big
cities
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can come with lots of
health
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problems that can come from many sources ,namely , pollution , densely populated areas ,
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and the list goes on , that said , I am going to be talking specifically about pollution , as
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is a problem that
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a lot
of big cites face , and can severely affect , breathing and eating , which are
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essential
for our survival ,
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, the city of Mumbai India is said to be one of the biggest worldwide,
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, the death rates from air
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diseases is
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relatively
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because the city is very polluted from its vast population .
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,
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there are many
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risk factors in larger
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, the healthcare quality is better than that in small towns or villages ,
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, the frequently ill citizens are more likely to get treated ,
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, those in towns ,
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not
geting
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getting
sick as much , still face some illnesses ,
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, not always do they get the proper treatment .
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, living in big
cities
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can be bad for one's
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,
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, it can
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provide the best treatment to those who are victims
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the dangers of living in those areas , unlike others who live in rural or
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small places
who
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get less sick but don't have the privilege to get diagnosed in a proper way .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • overcrowding
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • work pressures
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • lack of exercise
  • pandemics
  • green spaces
  • affordability
  • healthcare services
  • recreational facilities
  • cosmopolitan
  • diversity
  • personal development
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