Task 1: The charts give information about world forest in five different regions.

Task 1: The charts give information about world forest in five different regions.
The given pie charts depict the proportion of
world
fores
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forces
and
timber
owned by five continents across the
world
.
Overall
, it seems that North
America
has dominated the production of
fores
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forest
and
timber
with the average
percentage
for both
is
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being
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just over a quarter
from
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of
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world
production.
While
,
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the lowest
percentage
belongs to Asia that only has 16%
percents
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in
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average. To be more detailed, within
fores
percentage
across the
world
,
country
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the country
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having highest
percentage
is Africa reaching approximately a quarter. It is slightly different with North
America
providing a quarter of
world
fores
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forces
.
While
,
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Asia give the least
fores
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force
which is less than a fifth. It is obvious that, within the
timber
proportion, North
America
is the region providing the largest number of
timber
for less than a third. The second-best region is South
America
which is different
with
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North
America
in a very small number. The smallest one is Africa
that
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which
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has less than one in ten.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words world, fores, timber, america, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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