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The inequality between rich and poor nations is now wider than it has ever been before. What are the causes and what solutions can you suggest?

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The diversity between
wealth
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 and non-wealth
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 has improved dramatically in recent years rather than in the past.
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of
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 trend
problems
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problem
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 and will
offer
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 some solutions. It is no denying that nowadays technology and technological devices are developing.Through
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 ,some
countries
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 are becoming richer than others.Because
technological
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 world can
offer
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 to earn more money
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more easily.
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,the
countries
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 that use modern technology are changing into the richest and
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most developest
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developest
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developed
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such
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as
vast
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 majority of African
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countries
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 inhabitants still suffer from without enough finances to drink and eat even if we do not consider using modern gadgets .If they knew about modern life demands and earning easily ,they might leave out these
obstackles
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obstacles
.
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,
wealthycountry
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wealth country
 residents invariable believe that investment is
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 way
for
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successful
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 business world.
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 reason is that investing can
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 many benefits to the
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 invested .
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 can lead to
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 having enough income
to
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constructions
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 or
developing
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 sharply. There are,
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,some solutions for
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this trend problems
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,one of which is selling more modern technology and
indroducing
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introducing
 new ones to poorer
countries
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.
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 trading is
benefitial
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beneficial
 not only
poor
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to poor
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countries
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 but
also
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 riches too.If every
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countries
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country
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 know perfectly about earning from virtual life,nobody and nowhere will be poor.Another
offer
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 is helping
for
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poorer
countries
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by
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 richer ones.
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 reform can help them to start
new
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 life again.
Majority
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 of thriving places ,
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USA
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the USA
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,Russia and some
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European
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countries
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 have helped
to
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other developed
countries
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 which were poor before so far and now some of them change for
better
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 and have changed financially. As we have seen,various measures can be taken to tackle the problems.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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