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More and more people no longer read newspaper and watch TV to get information. Instead they use Internet to get actual news. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give your own opinions or relevant examples.

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In the modern era, many
people
 prefer to use electronic news to search for
information
 read
newspapers
 and watch
Television
. It is true
that is
 a positive development. Using the
Internet
 will make
people
 can be more up-to-date with the latest
information
 everywhere and every time they need it.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why using e-news is a positive development. Let's start by looking at accessibility.
People
 can search for news on the
internet
 accurately and instantly. Reading the headline news in
newspapers
 and
television
 will take more time and effort because the sources could manage first before distributing in general.
In contrast
, citizen nowadays spends their time a lot on the phone.
It is clear that
 using e-news to read
information
 is more effective than both
newspapers
 and
television
.
For example
, the
information
 on the
internet
 which provides modern visual and readable words can be accessed by everyone for free. Turning to another reason that
it is clear that
 the new trend of reading
information
 on the
internet
 will support going green.
This
 resulted in a drop the deforestation that was impacted by cutting trees to become paper which is the main source of
newspapers
.
Following
this
, it can be defined that
information
 is one of the main needs for productive age,
however
,
people
 who stay in productive age spend their activities in the office or school that may not be available
television
.
On the contrary
,
people
 could update
information
 on their own activities everywhere through the
internet
.
Hence
, it is undeniable that reading the
information
 on
Internet
 is more beneficial than other media.
Consequently
,
newspapers
 and
television
 are great media to get
information
 for
people
.
On the other hand
, it is obvious that many sources on the
internet
 which provide actual and factual
information
 will contribute to overcoming environmental problems and make
easy
Correct pronoun usage
it easy
show examples
 for
people
 to search for
information
.
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