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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmers (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals think that unpaid and voluntary work should be an important part of high school outside activities. So, they reckon that
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 can learn more about social lives and be aware of what is a real passion of them in the forthcoming. In that assumption, I agreed with
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 idea and I'll go over some benefits of working as a volunteer
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 they are studying. From my point of view, some of the non-paid community services could bring good results for both society and pupils. Because, on the one hand,
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 can gain some real experiences and obtain numerous different practical subjects from doing
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, a student can find their passion
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 working in different fields during their high school years. In the first place, it might be stressful for some pupils
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 figuring out their school paperwork, but it can be awarded as reach scholarships and receive high paid job offers eventually in their future careers.
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, doing free voluntary services is crucial to the people and children who are living in rural areas, and dealing with life difficulties. There are a bunch of people who are desperate for help with education, health, and other stuff from the charity organizations or activities like that. If
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 aim to create a better future for their surroundings they can make an effort by doing some valuable jobs
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 as teaching, mentoring and donating as well. In conclusion, there are an increasing number of
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 who want to change and fix current ailing social situations
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 as poverty, economic crisis, and other environmental problems;
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 assumption might be a great opportunity for them and the public as well. By working voluntarily,
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 can become more professional and mentally stronger in any work field they might face in the future. Most importantly, it is a win-win activity for both some
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 and the public.
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