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A University should accept male and female students equally in every subject.

#university #students
Some people believe that academics should provide
gender
 equality in
number
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 of graduate
students
 in every
subject
. I personally disagree with
this
 statement. The essay will first discuss the fact that
students
 should be accepted based on merit, the
subject
 they choose to
enroll
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to
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, and their academic potential.
To begin
 with, universities must look
in
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 the
students
’
scholar
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 achievements and study curriculum to judge their merit for acceptance. If done
otherwise
, many qualified
students
 would lose opportunities into getting accepted to their chosen courses. It is noteworthy that every student has the potential to learn, grow and become a successful member of society, no matter what their
gender
 is.
Moreover
,
students
 who applied for the
subject
 their chose
while
 being qualified for it
deserve
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 to be accepted. Practicing
gender
 equality in
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the numbers
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numbers
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 of accepted learners is not equality at all; it is in fact an unfair judgement of college applications.
As a result
,
Students
 have the right of getting
education
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 if
the
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 show a great interest
into
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 that
subject
.
Furthermore
, acceptance needs to be determined by
students
’ potential, as long as they show excellent academic abilities, whether they were
males
 or
females
.
For instance
, if there were twenty available places for an engineering course, and we got applications of 20 qualified
females
 and 10 unqualified
males
, should we be equal and accept half
males
 and half
females
?
This
 would be unfair to the other 10 qualified
females
. In
conclusions
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, accepting equal numbers of
males
 and
females
 in every
subject
 in universities is an unfair act which can make people lose great opportunities. For the admission process to be fair, tertiary institutions should base their acceptance on merit rather than on
gender
.
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