Many people think technological devices such as smart phones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Whether smartphones are a boon or a bane is a question we should all ask ourselves. In my opinion,
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I do agree that cell phones have many disadvantages, their advantages clearly outshine them. On one hand, these technological devices have put so many challenges for us.
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, the radiation emitted by it impacts our health. Not only
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but, it's
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very addictive. Studies have found that young kids who use cell phones frequently have less attention span compared to others. Many kids fall into
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addiction trap and easily get distracted from their studies.
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, children now spent more time playing video games in it rather than doing physical exercises.
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, the advantages are far more than the disadvantages. Smartphones have decreased the communication barrier to nil. Back in the day, sending letters was the only way of long-distance communication, which could take even years to receive.Meanwhile,
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device made it possible within milliseconds. Whether be it talking to one person from another part of the world or even sending a message to millions of people, all can be done with these devices in your hand.
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, the ease of getting information was never
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easy. Smartphones have made the student's life so easy. In
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recent pandemic, most of the schooling had become online-based.
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could never have been possible without these technological devices. In conclusion, I do agree that cell phones have many side effects but it's nothing compared to how much resourceful it is to us. The challenges it creates should not be ignored but solved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • communication
  • access to information
  • efficiency
  • addiction
  • privacy concerns
  • distraction
  • isolation
  • screen time
  • digital divide
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