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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Nowadays, our ecosystem has been damaged owing to
humans’
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 activities,
therefore
,people must think about the measures which can be taken to solve
this
 issue.
Hence
, in
this
 essay, I will discuss what the
government
 and each individual can do to minimize the problem.
First,
the
government
 must develop a new rule which can help people to protect the
environment
.Based on my experience, there are only a few rules which are powerful or make an impact on the concerning problem.
Also
, the
government
 should build a system which assists the process of recycling households’
waste
 to stop endangering the
environment
 owing to the chemical and biological reactions that can harm the ecosystem so that all the citizens can develop an advanced
waste
 recycling system to minimize the number of
waste
 and their chemical reactions from damaging the
environment
.
Nevertheless
, as an individual, we should use more sustainable materials for our daily activities.
For instance
, our
environment
 can process paper bag
waste
 easily compared to chemically processed materials,
such
 as
plastic
 bags which become one of the most hazardous wastes that damage the surroundings.
Therefore
, we should recycle
plastic
waste
 by turning it into different functionalities so there will be zero
plastic
waste
 from households.
For example
,
plastic
 bottles can be collected and cut in half to make a flower pot. In conclusion, as the
government
 develops new rules for the
environment
 and builds a recycling
waste
 system, each individual can protect the
environment
 by using more biodegradable materials and recycling
plastic
waste
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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