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Many people use distance-learning programs to study at home but some people think that it can't bring the benefit as much as attending college or university.To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#people #programs #study #home #benefit #college #university
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Many humans utilize distance-learning programs to study at home
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 some individuals assume that it cannot bring thee profit as much as going to college or
university
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.I disagree with
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 statement.
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 essay I intend to analyze many people
why
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who
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 prefer
distance-learning
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distance learning
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. It is indisputable that the distance learning mode is helpful, mainly for those living in remote areas,for those
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 physically challenged and for those who want to do a job
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 studying.
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Nevertheless
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 there are numerous advantages
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 actually a
university
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for example
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 attending a
university
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 provides the opportunity
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 face-to-face interaction with
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teachers.Classroom lectures are more educative and enlightening than
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reading
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written courseware
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 the interaction between the students and the teachers.The student not only masters the contents of the prescribed lessons but
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 gains a
depper indight
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deeper insight
 into the subject as the teacher elucidates from her own experiences.If there are any doubts in the mind of the student,the teacher can readily offer the necessary clarifications .If she has not been able to fully comprehend any particular aspect of the lesson she can request that it be explained to her again.And
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 one can easily access reference books and other valuable reading material from the
University
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 Library. One of the biggest disadvantages of distance learning is the high potential for confusion.There are no face-to-face teachers and fellow students constantly reminding you of pending assignments.If a student wants to successfully complete a distance learning course he or she must be motivated and focused.Disconnect from the network.The biggest enemy of learning online is a slow internet service provider or disconnection,in
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situation
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 the
students
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student's
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 desire to learn will fade or become frustrated.
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 a
university
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 education is certainly packed with several privileges.
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 no matter what field of study you pursue all of these will help you get the perfect education.
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