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Some people believe that nowadays too much money is being spent on weddings and birthdays. Why do you think it is happening? What can be done to improve the situation?

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Nowadays, one of the controversial issues relates to some communities which hold expensive parties
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 as weddings and birthdays. spending a plethora of cash on the arrangements.
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 happening
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 a few solutions will be discussed in the upcoming paragraph. First of all, to open the deliberation, the main reason is a status symbol, the community’s desire to show off society like spending an enormous amount for decoration, designing dresses, lighting and etc. just to show their lavish lifestyle through marriage and engagement ceremonies.
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 these ceremonies and special events build memories for a lifetime celebrated once in a lifetime. and will be always remembered and
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 why society wants to hold them as luxurious as they can.
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, virtual platforms
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 as social media lead communities toward extravagance.
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, celebrities illustrate their expensive parties on social media and peers who find them role models will try their best to perform like them. There are a number of steps that can be taken to resolve
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 problem. First of all, individuals should be fully aware of spending priorities. Investing in television programs teaches humankind if their financial conditions are not sound, there is a risk of them getting into debt. Educate the public to be more cautious.
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, models should be created in virtual networks for pupils who celebrate their special occasions less expensively and they feel happy at the same time.
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 can change individuals’ mentality about spending a lot bringing them happiness. In light of the above discussion, celebrating occasions expensively does not benefit either individuals or society. Taking a few simple measures can help to mitigate
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 issue.
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