mohouThe chart below shows the total number of hours per month from to 1980 to 2015 that people in USA used modern technology divided into four catagories.
The bar graph demonstrates the use of technology in America in four categories from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
, it is clear that
the use of radio rate accounted for the most proportion overwhelmingly. Moreover
, the rate of people who use a computer was the highest from 2005 to 2015.
Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that smartphone users were not at all to 0 until 1995, but from 2000 to 2015, there were significant changes in the number of people who utilize smartphones about 50 hours
to 350 hours
from 2000 to 2015,which was made up the second rank. In addition
, the figure for listening to the radio dominates the average of 350 hours
from 1980 to 1990. However
, it became dropped sharply from about 100 hours
to 270 hours
in 1995. Finally
, computer users maintained about 30 hours
between 1980 to 1990, After that 300 hours
from 2005. As a result
, it showed the first rank 360 hours
more than the three groups.Submitted by yup on
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