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Some experts believe that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Varied has a lot of land on the way to development.
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 , some
people
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 do not think they have satisfied enough from that.
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, citizens think they get some benefits for them. I totally that rich
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 have to support
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.
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some
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 feel dissatisfied because they compared their
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 with another
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 .
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 , if profits increase that means they need to pay more taxes and everything increases too. On the hand , I agree with that because in some
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 they increase so fast
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 they need to pay for that thing too much .
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, in China that
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 they
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 every single year
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 they need to pay for food , tax or something else with high costs.
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 , if your
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 has wealthy resources but you do not feel joyful with that so it is no point in that .
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 , some rich
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 live a rich life but they never want to make more money to get kind of crazy rich
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 . So I agree with someone who thinks the increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens any more satisfied because paying for living expenses will be more. In summary, the economic wealth of the
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 is essentially improving. I believe that rich
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 have more advantages for their citizens than poor
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.
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 will raise their salary, projects, and their lives, which they will satisfy in the future
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