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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.
The given pie chart illustrates information about the manufacture of
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seven different nations of passenger car production in 2015.
It is clear that
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 car production in Greater China has the most significant part
while
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Middle
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the Middle
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east
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 and Africa reached only 2%
over
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this
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 pie chart.
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, the passenger cars of Greater China and Europe combined account for more than half
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 the total. It is 26%,
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and 25
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% respectively.
While
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 ranked the second most large figure for North America it reached 19%. The figure
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 Japan and
Korea
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 passenger car production is 16%.
By contrast
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, the lowest proportion shows only 2% in the Middle East and Africa
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 South America shows reached double at 4%. South Asia, South America and Japan / Korea combined only 12%
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 the total

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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