It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct. There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly believed that the extinction of animal
species
is a natural phenomenon and preservation of these
species
is futile. I am in complete agreement with
this
idea. On the one hand, protecting animal
species
from the verge of extinction requires intensive investment. In order to implement
this
process, governments possessing a strong power of finances have to invest in creating new isolated habitats or medical treatment for worst cases… which will come at exorbitant costs. Admittedly, the culture related to those
species
and the diversity of ecosystems will be preserved.
Nevertheless
, the chance of succeeding in these preservations is not guaranteed as other factors
such
as diseases will put that effectiveness at stake.
Consequently
, governments’ economies will be wasted.
On the other hand
, the interruption of the annihilation course of animal
species
will alter the process of
evolution
. Million years ago, when the prevalence of human activities did not exist on our planet. Animal
species
becoming extinct still inevitably continue.
Due to
nature’s law, animals possessing inferior power will be hunted by other superior
species
which thrive in their habitats, fostering the
evolution
of each
species
with the aim of survivability. Rectifying these processes will demote the animals’ development as the requirement of the
evolution
of each
species
does not meet.
Consequently
, those
species
meeting other dangerous factors won’t promote
evolution
to protect themselves when the dependence on human activities diminishes the demand to evolve. In conclusion, the extinction of animal
species
is inevitable and prevention of that phenomenon is unlikely to make any progress
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