The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live
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The pie chart and the table illustrate the percentage of which country people living in Australia come from and the area
that
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where
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these people live.
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, the majority of Australian dwellers were born right in their birthplace.
Beside
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, it
seem
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that
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is a suitable place for residents of other countries to immigrate
According to
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the pie chart, the Australian population is 73% in their birthplace.
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people in other countries account for about 14%, which is twice as much as the UK. Residents who have home countries in New Zealand, China and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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account for negligible proportions of 3%, 2% and 1%. With the information
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given
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the table, 99% of Australians born in China live in the city, much higher than the figures for those from the Netherlands, the UK, or Australia, at 90%, 89%, and 83% respectively. New Zealand, consume the largest rate of those living in rural areas, at 20%.
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