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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevemt

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevemt
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The provided diagram depicts how to produce
sugar
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 which we need to consume from
sugar
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 canes.
Overall
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 , it is clear from a cursory glance that
this
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 process includes 7 steps, starting to grow and ending to dry. In the first place ,
Sugar
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 canes have to grow and be ready to harvest for 12-18 months. The second task is to gather them and
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 may be done by modern machines or farmers. Crushing is
also
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 a significant part of the production of
sugar
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 ,
that is
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 the third act. By that,
Sugar
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 canes are converted into
juice
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 , it has to be said that
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 activity is accomplished by special machines. After these steps , a more complex process begins. Purifying
juice
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 is one of them,
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, there is a limestone filter which helps to clean the
juice
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 of
sugar
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 cane.
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 is the fourth step and the next one is Evapator. There ,
Juice
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 is heated in order to make syrup. The sixth action is a centrifuge which consists of taking
sugar
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 crystals from the syrup.
At the end
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 of the process,
Sugar
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 is dried and cooled , Afterwards , we can take in
this
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 product.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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