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The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics

The table below shows social and economic indicators for dour countries in 1994, according to united Nations statistics
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The table chart displays four different economical
topic
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 in four
countries
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 (
Canada
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,
Japan
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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) in 1994, surveyed by United Nations.
It is clear that
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 signs are as followed: annual income per person (measured in US
dollar
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), life expectancy
ar
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 birth, daily calorie supply per person and adult literacy rate. Looking for an
overall
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 perspective,
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 have a
remarkable
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 higher figure than
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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.
To begin
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 with, both
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 have 99%
adults
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 literacy rate which
reflect
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 on salary each year correspondingly, accounting for 11100 (
Canada
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) and 15760 (
Japan
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).
In
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 average, the residents in
two
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countries
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are
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live longer than
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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, Canadien (76) just slightly lower than
Japaness
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Japanese
 (78).
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 but not least, the calorie absorb in Canadien have approximately 500 more than
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Japaness
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Japanese
.
On the other hand
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 have extremely less than developed
countries
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.
Accroding
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 to the survey, both
countries
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'
salary
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salaries
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 are under 200
dollar
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dollars
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 per year (160 and 130 US
dollar
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dollars
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 respectively). People who live in these two
countries
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 are minor about 25 years old than
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Canada
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those Canada
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 and
Japan
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 which may associate with
deficiency
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 of calorie
substaint
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sustain
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, with 1927 for
Peru
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 and 1749 for
Zaire
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. Education is more efficient in
Peru
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 with
the
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 literacy rate
at
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 68%, by
contract
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contrast
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,
Zaire
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 only has 34%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, canada, japan, peru, zaire with synonyms.
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