One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Over the past few decades,
health
has become one of the key factors in people
's lives, so that people
consistently experience a long life
. I believe it has brought more benefits to people
. I will review both the positive and negative aspects below.
There are tangible benefits that societies
derive from improved medical care
. Encouraging people
to see a doctor with advanced medical care
is always a simpler action in the process of maintaining optimal health
. In this
way, any health
problems
can be prevented, or in the worst case, their negative effects reduced. For example
, if people
progressively check their bodies, this
will help to more effectively counteract many diseases (and their effects) at an early stage of disease development. This
is important if only from the point of view of demographics, where by extending life
expectancy we not only allow older generations to benefit from life
, but it is also
the older generation that can also
help the younger generation. For example
, as the youngest generation is busier with work, grandparents can help take care
of the children and reduce the burden on the young. Moreover
, elders can teach their grandchildren basic customs and moral values.
On the other hand
, better health
means longer life
and our societies
are not ready for the challenges of this
. Significant problems
include providing enough food for the significantly growing number of people
on Earth, we have had problems
with this
for years, and there is no magical solution in sight.
In addition
, our pension systems are no longer suitable for significantly longer retirement periods. Almost all pension systems are dependent on the number of people
of working age, and extending life
expectancy significantly increases the tax burden on this
group. It is very likely that it will be necessary to extend working hours, which is of course a very politically unpopular decision and only mature societies
can introduce such
solutions across political divides.
In conclusion, it is clear that
the development of medical care
brings far more positives than negatives. However
, we must remember that this
is not a zero-sum change and the negatives are still very relevant. Longer life
expectancy brings with it costly problems
, especially in developing countries whose societies
have not yet had enough time to get rich and be able to bear the costs of this
change. However
, the social changes that are taking place due to
medical developments are inevitable and we need to think more about how to make the most of them than how to counteract them.Submitted by BEST Piotr Czerwiński on
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