One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Over the past few decades,
health
has become one of the key factors in
people
's lives, so that
people
consistently experience a long
life
. I believe it has brought more benefits to
people
. I will review both the positive and negative aspects below. There are tangible benefits that
societies
derive from improved medical
care
. Encouraging
people
to see a doctor with advanced medical
care
is always a simpler action in the process of maintaining optimal
health
. In
this
way, any
health
problems
can be prevented, or in the worst case, their negative effects reduced.
For example
, if
people
progressively check their bodies,
this
will help to more effectively counteract many diseases (and their effects) at an early stage of disease development.
This
is important if only from the point of view of demographics, where by extending
life
expectancy we not only allow older generations to benefit from
life
, but it is
also
the older generation that can
also
help the younger generation.
For example
, as the youngest generation is busier with work, grandparents can help take
care
of the children and reduce the burden on the young.
Moreover
, elders can teach their grandchildren basic customs and moral values.
On the other hand
, better
health
means longer
life
and our
societies
are not ready for the challenges of
this
. Significant
problems
include providing enough food for the significantly growing number of
people
on Earth, we have had
problems
with
this
for years, and there is no magical solution in sight.
In addition
, our pension systems are no longer suitable for significantly longer retirement periods. Almost all pension systems are dependent on the number of
people
of working age, and extending
life
expectancy significantly increases the tax burden on
this
group. It is very likely that it will be necessary to extend working hours, which is of course a very politically unpopular decision and only mature
societies
can introduce
such
solutions across political divides. In conclusion,
it is clear that
the development of medical
care
brings far more positives than negatives.
However
, we must remember that
this
is not a zero-sum change and the negatives are still very relevant. Longer
life
expectancy brings with it costly
problems
, especially in developing countries whose
societies
have not yet had enough time to get rich and be able to bear the costs of
this
change.
However
, the social changes that are taking place
due to
medical developments are inevitable and we need to think more about how to make the most of them than how to counteract them.
Submitted by BEST Piotr Czerwiński on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consequences
  • improved medical care
  • life expectancy
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • healthcare
  • quality of life
  • population
  • economic burden
  • elderly
  • dependency
  • technology
  • ethical concerns
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