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Being a celebrity, such as a famous film star or sports personality, brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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Being a famous person,
for example
, a popular actor or a sports
star
 is problematic
as well as
 beneficial.
This
 essay believes that fame has more negative effects because it comes with the cost of being a burden to the
star’s
 family, and it can threaten the
star’s
 mental
health
. The first negative effect fame has on the
star’s
 life is the burden it puts on his family.
That is
 not only because of the paparazzi that keep chasing them everywhere they go and eventually putting them at physical risk, but
also
 because of the pink media which posts news about them that completely breach privacy and are often related to intimate relationships.
For example
, it is very well known how much detrimental the role of paparazzi and pink media was on Princess Diana’s sons and they report that those publications and breaking news scarred them for a lifetime just because they come from a famous family. The second reason behind the negativity of being a
star
 is that it creates an unsafe environment that may endanger the
star’s
 mental
health
. Being constantly under the spotlight and lacking the minimum amount of privacy in the person’s life is documented to be detrimental to
this
 latter’s mental
health
.
For instance
, the famous movie
star
 Marilyn Monroe is known to have committed suicide because she could not cope with a life with no privacy at all, and the same applies to the famous Egyptian
star
 Souad Husni and many others. In conclusion, in my opinion, the negative aspects of fame outweigh the positive ones especially because it puts a burden on the
star’s
 family and puts their mental
health
 in danger.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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