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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that a newspaper is a better
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 of
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 rather than the
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 even number of
people
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 who read
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 on the
Internet
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 increased. I totally disagree with
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 opinion because advanced technology on the
Internet
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 can be reliable in all aspects. First of all, the
Internet
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 has wide
data
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 that can be provided transparently to readers. The
data
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 may be searched on the
internet
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 to get
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 information,
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 newspaper only gives information about limited
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 on the
news
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.
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, when I read
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 about the Lamborghini burn-out on Jakarta highway, I just know the event from the author's perspective even though the author gives some
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 from the interviewer's perspective.
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, if I read on the
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, I will get other angle
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people
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 who had been there.
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, they are likely to make a video on the events so that the
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 is likely more accurate.
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, the
internet
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 is a trustworthy
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.
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, the occurrence of
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 tends to spread quickly on the
internet
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. The fast delivery
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 makes it more trustable and
people
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 will be comfortable reading it.
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, it may take a day for making a newspaper and
people
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 get the
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 on their hands in the day after occurrence,
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people
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 give more attention to the newest event by using a mobile phone to read the
news
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.
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, most
people
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 have a better experience of reading
news
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 on the
internet
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To sum up
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, I believe that cutting-edge technology can outrace the important
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 of
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due to
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 more transparent
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 and fast spreading.
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