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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that a newspaper is a better
source
 of
news
 rather than the
internet
 even number of
people
 who read
news
 on the
Internet
 increased. I totally disagree with
this
 opinion because advanced technology on the
Internet
 can be reliable in all aspects. First of all, the
Internet
 has wide
data
 that can be provided transparently to readers. The
data
 may be searched on the
internet
 to get
further
 information,
while
 newspaper only gives information about limited
data
 on the
news
.
For instance
, when I read
news
 about the Lamborghini burn-out on Jakarta highway, I just know the event from the author's perspective even though the author gives some
data
 from the interviewer's perspective.
However
, if I read on the
internet
, I will get other angle
people
Change preposition
from people
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 who had been there.
Moreover
, they are likely to make a video on the events so that the
data
 is likely more accurate.
Therefore
, the
internet
 is a trustworthy
source
.
Secondly
, the occurrence of
news
 tends to spread quickly on the
internet
. The fast delivery
source
 makes it more trustable and
people
 will be comfortable reading it.
For instance
, it may take a day for making a newspaper and
people
 get the
news
 on their hands in the day after occurrence,
while
people
 give more attention to the newest event by using a mobile phone to read the
news
.
Hence
, most
people
 have a better experience of reading
news
 on the
internet
To sum up
, I believe that cutting-edge technology can outrace the important
source
 of
news
due to
 more transparent
data
 and fast spreading.
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