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To meet the grow need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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The world population growth is creating worries about
food
 demand and offers in the future.
Therefore
 one option has been found, and it is
insects
 transformed into human
food
.
However
, there is some opposition about it and
this
 essay will discuss some positive and negative effects of
this
 new choice of
food
 on human health. Specialists say that there is not enough land to plant and produce
food
 for the
further
 growing population. And so, other sources of
food
 are being sought in order to fulfil the increasing demand tendency of
food
. One of them was found in
insects
, for the protein and nutrients biologists say they have, especially on their crater.
However
, there are some harmful reasons to discard
this
 option as the only feeding backwards. Harms might concern not only with
insects
’ potential to spread out sickness as disease vectors but
also
 with their impact on the natural feeding chain, as they have the duty to banish some parasites from the crops. As a balance, if plantations get hindered by parasites,
food
 production would
overall
 be prejudiced.
Therefore
, the drawbacks far overweight the benefits of eating
insects
.
Thus
, it just makes us think that each thing has its own place in the world, and definitely
insects
 were not made to be on people’s dinner tables. In conclusion, the risk to health and nature by eating
insects
 does not worth it as a
food
 complement to the lack of
food
 in the face of the increasing
food
 demand now and in the future.
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