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Today, thanks to improvements in communication technology and transportation, people can work and live wherever they want. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is believed that modern
technology
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 developed in communication and transport.
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, people can
work
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 and stay where they desire. I agree with the advantage's development outweigh the disadvantages. On the one hand, In the
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 people live with advanced
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.
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, They can
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 anywhere
ofbecause
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because
of because
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 improvement in communication
technology
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. The notion complete
work
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 through
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, where they can attend office meetings.
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, Employees complete the process of communicating through some apps and they report via video calls and video conferences.
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, employees and employers can connect over long distances and at that
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 they are in contact with face-to-face communication. They clear every doubt through
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, in today's life
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every person works for their own a foreign country in a sitting place.
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benefit
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 they are spending
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 with family, and friends and saving
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 for own selves.
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, transportation improvements can beneficial for every those person who can less
time
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 for travelling and driving.
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, the government are improving transportation and they are providing those transports which are fastest to arrive the destination place in cou country
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 metro train are providing the fastest way and less
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 to arrive the individual's destination place.
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, sometimes workers are late for their
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 and after ,that they are fast to going their advance transporting
technology
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. For illustrate, many countries provide advanced
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 in transportation.
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, advanced technologies are most beneficial for every employee and employer who can complete
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work
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 every target on
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. I believed that the advantage of
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 development outweighs the disadvantages.
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