Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

some people argue that we do not remember the actual reason for traditional festivals and religious as well, we just consider them as a fun moment. ,Well as far as my concerns are I do not agree with
this
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. Traditional and religious
events
become a source of
enjoyment
.
For instance
, in UK
Christmas
is the ceremony of joy, happiness and giving and taking gifts and giving charity.
Furthermore
, at ,
Christmas
all the family members come together at their paternal house and celebrate that event. Most
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people look forward to the
Christmas
event as a period of
enjoyment
and holiday period as well,
instead
of practising religion. The same behaviour can be seen at non-religious
events
such
as family gatherings, bbq nights and bonfires. People associate
this
event with making fireworks in community parks to enjoy the moment because
enjoyment
is a primary right of everybody.
Secondly
, I do not agree with the idea that
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underlying the meaning of
such
events
have been forgotten.
for example
, in the UK at the primary ,level children learn in detail about their religion and religious
events
like
Christmas
,
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and Easter. They
also
have
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orchestra who sing their religious
song
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at any ceremony as well. In sum , it is true that
public
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considered religious
events
and
other traditional occasion
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as
enjoyment
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moments but it is
total
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misconception that we forgot the real meaning behind these
events
.
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  • Commercialization
  • Globalization
  • Cultural dilution
  • Traditional values
  • Secularization
  • Festivity
  • Heritage
  • Individualism vs. collectivism
  • Consumer culture
  • Intangible cultural heritage
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