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In many countries government spend a lot of money on arts. However, some think government should spend more on health and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days a growing number of states are funding more arts. Contrary to
this
 belief, a few argue that the government should be allocating funds towards
health
 and education. I agree with the second notion as
this
 will be beneficial large to society. The essay will explain the reasons for my stance with relevant examples and arguments. To start with, education plays
a
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paramount of difference in our society. Through schooling we can grow economically as a society,
thus
 creating job opportunities and boosting revenue
generation
. Another view is that more revenue
generation
 will proliferate more tax
generation
, resulting in income
generation
 for a country.
For instance
, Austria generates 20 per cent of its GDP through direct income tax collection.
Additionally
, another factor to side with my view is the point of life expectancy. Spending more on
health
 factors, like increasing buildings and new equipment or machinery will not only be a pivotal factor to general public
health
 but will
also
 provide for their well-being.
For instance
, many countries like Pakistan lack the basic infrastructural facilities to treat patients for even common viruses like pneumonia, resulting in more deaths.
Lastly
, a part of the public believes in investing more in arts,
such
 as in some cases like Bollywood and Hollywood where there is a massive
generation
 of wealth and opportunities for the government. Though, most of the funding is private. To summarize, Government should prioritise
health
 and education, as
this
 will not only generate new income streamlines and help in their well-being but
also
 provide better living opportunities for the people.
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