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Some people believe that internet is good and creates no problems. Others believe that the internet is negative on both the individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

#people #internet #society
The
internet
 has become a major factor for many sectors like business, consumer and
government
. Everyone around the world use the
internet
. Many believe it is a terrible invention, It can
effect
 both society and individual in a certain way. I completely agree that the
internet
 can
effect
 the individual negatively.
However
, I do not agree that the
internet
 has a negative impact on the society. In
this
 essay will explain both sides. On the one hand, people nowadays spend more time on the cyber world and neglect their real life.
Hence
, isolation and loneliness leads to social communication disorder and depression.
Furthermore
, several studies showed that spending extra time on the
internet
 will cause serious injuries. As an example of that backache, eyes sight disorder, and shoulder stiffness.
As well as
, scammers who can steal personal and financial details and cause harm and danger. I total agree that the
internet
 has a negative
effect
 on individual.
On the other hand
, cyber world has a huge positive
effect
.
Firstly
, It has improved the citizens lifestyle. Nowadays, families and friends with the busy lifestyle get the chance to reach out each other through
internet
.
Internet
 is a amazing tool for communication.
Secondly
, ease
government
 fees collections , people now can pay their
government
 fees and due payments online through
government
 website.
Thirdly
, economics and business with the
internet
 era have changed rapidly. Consumer culture has been changed. Customer can do their on product research, they can go online and compare the price and quality for other competitor in a seconds. In conclusion, I totally agree the
internet
 harm the individual in a negative way.
However
, I agree that the society has improved from the amazing invention. Regards, Rawan Alkhubaizi On 22 May 2023, at 5:02 PM, rawan alkhubaizi <[email protected]> wrote:
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