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Some people believe that internet is good and creates no problems. Others believe that the internet is negative on both the individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

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The
internet
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 has become a major factor for many sectors like business, consumer and
government
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. Everyone around the world use the
internet
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. Many believe it is a terrible invention, It can
effect
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 both society and individual in a certain way. I completely agree that the
internet
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 can
effect
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 the individual negatively.
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, I do not agree that the
internet
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 has a negative impact on the society. In
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 essay will explain both sides. On the one hand, people nowadays spend more time on the cyber world and neglect their real life.
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, isolation and loneliness leads to social communication disorder and depression.
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, several studies showed that spending extra time on the
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 will cause serious injuries. As an example of that backache, eyes sight disorder, and shoulder stiffness.
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, scammers who can steal personal and financial details and cause harm and danger. I total agree that the
internet
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 has a negative
effect
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 on individual.
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, cyber world has a huge positive
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.
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, It has improved the citizens lifestyle. Nowadays, families and friends with the busy lifestyle get the chance to reach out each other through
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.
Internet
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 is a amazing tool for communication.
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, ease
government
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 fees collections , people now can pay their
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 fees and due payments online through
government
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 website.
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, economics and business with the
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 era have changed rapidly. Consumer culture has been changed. Customer can do their on product research, they can go online and compare the price and quality for other competitor in a seconds. In conclusion, I totally agree the
internet
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 harm the individual in a negative way.
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, I agree that the society has improved from the amazing invention. Regards, Rawan Alkhubaizi On 22 May 2023, at 5:02 PM, rawan alkhubaizi <[email protected]> wrote:
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